The-iMortal's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[OverBurn (MAC12 Entry)]

Great melodic track with a very warm sound!

RobSoundtrack responds:

Thankya mucho!

[The Rainbow Song [WIP]]

Nice! I particularly like the solo at 3:00. It has a feel-good vibe. All it needs is vocals, and then you'd have a great composition going.

Troisnyx responds:

Any lyrics ideas please? :3 I'm kinda clueless...
But I'm really glad you like it! Thank you! x

[DJ Babokon - Revelations]

A fantastic effort. Musically good and correct synths applied. However, there are still some downsides.

There is way too much sparkle to the hi-hats and cymbals. The snare could definitely have a bit more body to it. There is no bass line (listening through subwoofer).

The track as a whole sounds very clouded and too atmospheric. I think the sparkly hats and cymbals highly contribute to this.

It sounds a bit too busy at the parts (3:05 is an example), I believe because of the main talking synth being used. It would probably sound better if that synth was either replaced with something more subtle or removed. That way, there's more impact when the dub gets in. I have to say though, those parts, musically, are quite great. You just need to bring out that melody more so the average listener doesn't have to put effort into listening to the tune, without giving those parts more impact than they need.

"E-e-er-error!" Awesome! Loved it! Fits perfectly with the track.

All in all, a fantastic effort but sounds a bit too full. If you listen to professional electro, and music in general, you will notice that the melodies/main dub riffs stick out more than anything else in the mix, without overriding the whole track. In this track, your melodies and dub riffs almost blend in too much with the rest of the mix. This still sounds good to musicians because we can easily identify the melody and enjoy it, but to the average listener, it can be a bit too much effort to enjoy.

Well done.

DJ-Babokon responds:

Wow now that was a proper review! Congratulations sir, you've actually offered constructive criticism on Newgrounds. I'll work on making everything stand out and stuff and I appreciate the dual perspective. Thanks for the review.

[Insanctuary Wrote Me a Poem]

Ahahaha!

Was this via PM?

AKACCMIOF responds:

Nah, it was in a thread that got deleted :P The Insanctuary Simulator thread if you remember that :P The dude has since pmd me since, and I have significantly more respect for him than I did when I made this, but it is all word for word :)

[FS: The-iMortal]

Lol

It's not bad for imrpov - definitely not the best. You did some research ;)

FairSquare responds:

Songwriting is clearly not one of my strongest points :p
But hey, at least it's a song about you huh? :D

[Acid Paradox - Creepy Mansion]

Pretty damn cool

Pretty sick dub riffs you got going here, mate. The vocals are good, however, the note when you sing "find", I think, would sound way better if it was a higher note, rather than lower.

I remember listening to one of your songs in the past and noticing the same thing with the vocals. When you also hit the lower note, your voice doesn't sound as good - there's like a break between singing and talking you hit, and it is just that bit off-putting.

Also, there were a few parts here where it didn't flow too well, especially at 4:33. But really, not a massive issue. Maybe just a quiet cymbal on the beat would've helped flow?

Anyway, great track! Definitely a great contender for the contest.

Acid-Paradox responds:

Back when i started to make the lyrics for this track , there were some changes:

The lyrics " the evil man is now behind me , with a knife on his hand , he's gonna kill,kill,kill me" were there since the beginning , however instead of the part you mentioned there was another recording of a verse that was like this:

" Gotta be fast ,
run on this path and call 911,
but i can't seem to find the damn exit,
help me"

and it was high pitched notes , but i didn't really like it because it sounded like a kid's movie song; pretty childish because of my voice whenever i sing on high notes. So i scratched that and made the ones that are on the song.

I agree with the transition to the outro you mentioned though , i wanted to make it like a sudden move but i think i over did it a bit , maybe a small impact would make it sound more full but yeah, i was pretty tired of spending so much time on this track and i really wanted to end it that day.

Thanks for the review!

Ruben -Acid Paradox-

[Song V]

Noise more than music

You've just chucked a heap of synth tracks together. It doesn't really work. There were some parts that actually sounded pretty cool though, such as the very beginning.

The harmony just isn't working - this is why this song sounds too busy and noisy. Have you learned any scales? Learning scales will help HEAPS when it comes to writing a melody and harmony.

SpitNeck responds:

Yes, I Know my scales and all that jazz, this was more of an abstract attempt at music. I myself like how the middle part came out, but I know that the sounds might not be appealing to everybody. Anyways, thank you for taking the time to review this.

I enjoy experimenting with my music.